Writing_ Process essay_ Le Ngoc Xuan Mai
Nowadays the technology is booming. Thus, sellers
make use of the popularity of the internet to purchase their products. They
also open online shops to vary the choices of customers. People who want to buy
online should know basic steps when shopping online. Now i will guide you how
to buy a product from “Cucre.vn”
The first step in the
process of buying online is to decide which products you will choose. In order to pick up the products, you
can look at the category in the top of the page . They can be fashion,
furniture, mom and kids,etc. Click to see which products you want to buy.
The most important step
when buying online is comparing prices and features among shops. With the same
products, in this store they can be
cheaper than in other stores.There are many sites which can help us compare the
price of the various products online. For example, if you want to buy a hair dryer,
you can compare the price between “Cucre.vn” and “hotdeal.vn” to choose the
more reasonable one. It is clear that, if we have chance of comparing the
prices as well quality among store, it is much better.
Once we decide to buy a
product, the last step is the process of the payment of money for the actual
purchase. In this step, you need make an order before. Only when you click on “muangay”
on your right column, a price and kind of payment table will appear.There are various methods of online payment that are
used to buy online. You can transfer money directly to the account bank of the
merchant or give money to delivery person. After that, you just need wait a
call from Cucre staff informing when you can receive your product.
In general, buying
online is one of best choices for all shoppers who want convenience. If you
follow all steps above, i am sure that you will find it simple whenever you go
shopping online
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Nowadays the
technology is booming. Thus, sellers make use of the popularity of the internet
to purchase their products. They also open online shops to vary the choices of
customers. People who want to buy online should know basic steps when shopping
online. Now i will guide you how to buy a product from “Cucre.vn”
The first step in the
process of buying online is to decide which products you will choose. In order to pick up the products, you
can look at the category in the top
of the page . They can be fashion, furniture, mom and kids,etc. Click to see
which products you want to buy.
A small tip for you when
buying online is comparing prices and features among shops. With the same
products, in this store they can be cheaper than in other stores.There are many sites which
can help us compare the price of the various products online. For example, if
you want to buy a hair dryer, you can compare the price between “Cucre.vn” and
“hotdeal.vn” to choose the more reasonable one. It is clear that, if we have
chance of comparing the prices as well quality among store, it is much better.
Once we decide to buy
a product, the next step is placing an order. This step includes the process of
the payment of money for the actual purchase. Only when you click on “muangay”
on your right column, a price and kind of payment table will appear.There are various methods of online payment
that are used to buy online. You can transfer money directly to the account
bank of the merchant or give money to delivery person. After that, you just
need wait a call from Cucre staff informing when you can receive your product.
In general, buying
online is one of best choices for all shoppers who want convenience. If you
follow all steps above, namely choosing products and placing order, i am sure
that you will find it simple whenever you go shopping online
Hello Mai! After reading your process essay about “How to shop online on Cucre.vn”, I have some feedback for you:
ReplyDelete1. The introduction of this essay contains all the necessary elements (few general statements, a thesis statement, background information); however, personally I think it can be better if it is more eye-catching.
2. I can follow your instructions easily. However, from my perspective, the step “comparing prices and features among shops” should not be included in this process because it’s just your own opinion. Actually, the process of shopping online on Cucre.vn doesn’t have this stage.
3. The essay is organized effectively. The body discusses the steps one by one. Normally, each step will be described in a paragraph. I can see that your essay has 4 phases, nevertheless, they are instructed in only 3 paragraphs. Moreover, you should explain the importance of each step in the beginning of each paragraph.
4. The conclusion has restated the thesis and wrap up the essay. Despite this, you should mention the website Cucre.vn in this conclusion because you are instructing people how to shop online on this website.
5. You have used the transitional devices flexibly. I really like this.
In general, you did a good job. I hope my feedback will be useful for you! Keep practicing.
hi Mai. After reading your esay, i have some comments below:
ReplyDelete1. Introduction: it contains the general statements, a thesis statement, background information but in my opinion , you should make it softer because you use the connection like in the spoken English. Moreover, notice your grammar when you use " nowadays", "now", you should put the comma after. in the sentence 'They also open online shops to vary the choices of customers.', you ought to make clear that who "they "are . giving the number of steps in this part seems to be better.
2. Body: overall, i think your writing should be put in the every paragraph to see it easily. it 's good when you metioned the comparison element for the same products in features and price. your explain and example 's good. however, final step is important in this process . you should give us some payment methods such as pay by credit card or through voucher..and the way the buyers receive the product after they paid. I think you should talk about the ways the customer receive their product.
3. conclusion: you should mention the website Cucre.vn in this conclusion because you are instructing people how to shop online on this website. and restate the above steps .
4. In general, your writing meets the demands of a process essay.n general, your language is very good because you use words flexibly and there are quite many structures you did. Hope my comments helful for you.
Best,
Hiền