Topic : Choose a real online
service on the Internet then write a process essay to instruct the customer
have to shop online.
Essay
Throughout human existence, man has strived to develop and use new and more
beneficial tools in order to improve his standard of living.
Shopping online is one of the most changing tools in our life. With a computer
connected to the network, you only need a few simple steps and can choose
for themselves the products they want, without consuming much time and energy.
Vatgia.com is considered head of electronic commerce website in the top
e-commerce sites in Vietnam, in terms of users and traffic. Customers can purchase
favorite products with just a few simple steps follow:
Firstly, people have to register at www.vatgia.com and
choose products that you want to buy by entering product name into the
search bar.When you have identified and selected the products you need to buy
the first thing you should do is find out more information about our products
by those who have previously used by looking at product reviews and inquiry. In
addition to the price you also need to find out the status of product quality
(old or new? Warranty period? Origin of the product?When you find out about the
price and condition of the product, the next thing you need to consider is the
reputation of the booth. You can find out more information through the
introduction of the booth or booth reviews by click on the item to see the
reviews. Participants can purchase on their new assessment of the booth. -
However, you also need to carefully consider each evaluated on the booth. Read
Reviews majority?
Secondly, checking store information. You need to do is contact the store to
check product information prior to the decision to buy the product? Avoid out
of stock or wrong price .... This step is very important and when participants
purchase them you need to take this step to avoid mistakes in the purchase.
Then, placing an order. On the website you choose “mua hàng” to add selected to
cart. You can view and select products in your cart. To continue to buy
products click “tiep tuc mua hang”. You can enter the “ số lượng mua hàng
“you want to purchase in the quantity box or check the “Xóa” box to remove
products from the cart. Then you click on “ tính lại” to view your current cart.
Finally, you have to provide personal information and choose payment
method. People need to fill information of the purchaser and
consignee on the registration form. After filling all the information you
choose payment method and click Next steps 2 to move on to review the company
information and payment method. After reviewing the payment method, you click
Next Step 3 to confirm the information and ordering. You review the shopping
cart and order one again and click on Send orders to carry out the company sent
orders to sell that product. After registering products for about 1 minute, you
will receive an email automatically about the registration order so that you
can easily check if necessary.
It can be seen that that placing an
order at www.vatgia.com is not
difficult. Everybody can easily buy many
quality products in this website.
Version 2:
Throughout human existence, man has strived to develop and use new
and more beneficial tools in order to improve his standard of living. Shopping
online is one of the most changing tools in our life. With a computer connected
to the network, people only need a few simple steps and can choose for themselves
the products they want, without consuming much time and energy. Vatgia.com is
considered head of electronic commerce website in the top e-commerce sites in
Vietnam, in terms of users and traffic. Customers can purchase favorite
products with just a few simple steps follow:
Firstly, people have to access at www.vatgia.com and choose
products that you want to buy by entering product name into the search bar. When you have identified and selected the products you need, the first thing you
should do is to find out more information about our products by those who have
previously used by looking at product reviews and inquiry. In addition to the
price you also need to find out the status of product quality (old or new? warranty
period? Origin of the product? When you find out about the price and condition
of the product, the next thing you need to consider is the reputation of the
booth. You can find out more information through the introduction of the booth
or booth reviews by click on the item to see the reviews. Also participants can
purchase on their new assessment of the booth. - However, you also need to
carefully consider each evaluated on the booth.
The next step is checking store information. You should contact to
the store to check product information prior to decide to buy or not? Avoid out
of stock or wrong price.... This step is very important and when participants
purchase them, you need to take this step to avoid mistakes in the purchase.
The third set of steps involves placing an order. On the website
you choose “purchase” to add selected to cart. You can view and select products
in your cart. To continue to buy products click “continue to buy”. You can
enter the “quantity“ you want to purchase in the quantity box or check the
“delete” box to remove products from the cart. Then you click on “calculate ” to view your current cart.
Finally, you have to provide personal information and choose
payment method. People need to fill information of the purchaser and
consignee on the registration form. After filling all the information you
choose payment method and click Next steps 2 to move on to review the company
information and payment method. After reviewing the payment method, you click
Next Step 3 to confirm the information and ordering. Afterwards you review the
shopping cart and order one again and click on Send orders to carry out the
company sent orders to sell that product. After registering products for about
1 minute, you will receive an email automatically about the registration order
so that you can easily check if necessary.
It can be seen that that placing an order at www.vatgia.com is not difficult. Everybody can easily
buy many quality products in this
website. Therefore, vatgia.com
is always voted the most convenient and
reliable site by consumers.
Hi Nga,
ReplyDeleteWith the purpose of making you essay better, i have some comments for you:
Firstly, i can't deny that the introduction of your essay is very good. The way you guide us to the issue ( or the topic ) is realy effective and attractive as well. In addition, there is nearly no big mistake in the first paragragh. It's such a wonderful thing.
Secondly, about the body, i don't have much comments for you because like the first one, you did a very good job. All the steps are described clearly.
However, there is one thing that i don't really like about your essay. It is the conclusion is too short as i expected. You can add more sentence to make it more interesting so that the readers can remember all the things you have mentioned.
That's all i want to share with you about this essay. Hope that you find it useful.
Thank you for reading!
Try better!
Hi Nga, after reading your process essay, i have some comments for you:
ReplyDelete- Strong points:
+ The introductions of the essay contain all the neccessary elements(background information, thesis, plan of development)
+ I'm able to follow the instructions you provided.
+ The essay is organized well. The outline is clear. You divide the process of buying online via ''vatgia.com'' into 4 steps, each one is instructed in one paragraph
+ You used transitional sentences flexibly, good job!
- Weak points:
+ I think you should explain the importance of each step in the beginning of each paragraph so that readers can have a general vision about the process
+ I think your conclusion ends suddenly, you can say more about saving time without going to particular store to buy products only with 4 simple steps above on the website ''vatgia.com'', etc.
Do hope my comments are helpful for you. Keep practicing.