VERSION 1:
Nowadays,
Internet has revolutionized the way people purchase products. Online shopping
has been becoming more and more popular all over the world. Among many online
shopping websites, eBay.com is one of the most largest world's online marketplace. Now, it is not difficult to shop online
on eBay if you follow six simple steps below.
The process of shopping online on
eBay begins with the registration. When you
register as an eBay member, you can bid on and purchase items easily. To
register, you click the “register” button at the top left corner on the eBay
homepage. You will be asked to enter your name, email address, eBay user ID and
password. After filling-in the registration form, you click the “Submit” button
to complete your registration.
The second step is finding the item that you want to purchase. Items for
sale on eBay are put into categories, listed down on the left-hand
side of the page. You can browse through the list of categories by clicking the
“Browse by category” button. Alternatively, if you know exactly the name of the
product that you are looking for, you can enter the
keywords into the search box or click the “Advanced” button at the top of the
page. Then, eBay will bring up every item that
includes your keywords.
In the subsequent stage, you have to read the item description and the seller's feedback carefully. If
you have any questions about the item, you can find the answers by clicking the “Ask a question” link.
This will help you to get an idea of how trustworthy a particular
seller is before buying.
Next, you can choose to place a bid or buy it instantly. You should
check the item page to see what purchase options are available. You can either
place a bid on an item or purchase it instantly by clicking the “Buy It Now” button.
After you win the auction or click the “Buy It Now” button, you have to pay for the product. To pay with
one of the electronic payment methods offered by the seller, click the “Pay Now” button in the listing.
Finally, when you receive
the product, make sure that it fits the item description. If you
are satisfied with the item, you can leave a positive feedback about your
seller through your “my eBay” at the top of the
page. If you have a complaint about the item,
you should contact the seller to solve the problem immediately.
In conclusion, registration, finding the item, reading its description
and the seller's feedback, choosing
to place a bid or buy instantly, paying money and checking it after receiving
are six main stages to shop online effectively on eBay.com.
VERSION 2:
VERSION 2:
Nowadays, the Internet
has become an indispensable tool for people and it has revolutionized the way
they purchase products. More people are able to do many things that they could
not do before. Online shopping is an excellent example of this. It has been becoming more and more popular all over the world. Among many online
shopping websites, eBay.com is one of the largest world's
online marketplace. Now, it is not difficult to shop online on eBay.com if you
follow six simple steps below.
The process of shopping online on
eBay begins with the registration. When you
register as an eBay member, you can bid on and purchase items easily. To
register, you click the “register” button at the top left corner on the eBay
homepage. You will be asked to enter your name, email address, eBay user ID and
password. After filling-in the registration form, you click the “Submit” button
to complete your registration.
The
second step is finding the item that you want to purchase. Items for sale on
eBay are put into categories, listed down on the left-hand
side of the page. You can browse through the list of categories by clicking the
“Browse by category” button. Alternatively, if you know exactly the name of the
product that you are looking for, you can enter the
keywords into the search box or click the “Advanced” button at the top of the
page. Then, eBay will bring up every item that
includes your keywords.
In
the subsequent stage, you have to read the item description and the seller's feedback carefully. By clicking
on an item, you will be brought to its individual auction page. You should check
carefully details such as current price, the description about the item's
condition and features, postage costs and payment options that the seller
accepts. If you have any questions about the item, you can find the answers by
clicking the “Ask a question” link. The number next to a seller's
username is the percentage of feedback he/she has received that is positive.
Clicking on the number will show you the total feedback received and the
comments left about the seller by his buyers. This will help you to get an idea
of how trustworthy a
particular seller is before buying.
Next,
you can choose to place a bid or buy the item instantly. You should check the
item page to see what purchase options are available. When you click on the
'place bid' button, you will be taken to the bidding screen and you have to enter
the maximum price you are willing to pay. You can also purchase it instantly by
clicking the “Buy It Now”
button. This means that a seller is willing to accept a fixed price for the good.
After
you win the auction or click the “Buy It Now” button, you have to pay for the product. You can pay instantly
through PayPal, or use any other payment option accepted by the seller. To pay
with one of the electronic payment methods offered by the seller, click the “Pay Now” button in the listing.
Finally, when you receive the product,
make sure that it fits the item description. If you
are satisfied with the item, you can leave a positive feedback about your
seller through your “my eBay” at the top of the
page. If you have a complaint about the item,
you should contact the seller to solve the problem immediately.
In
conclusion, with increased use of Internet, more and more people prefer to shop
online, especially on eBay.com because of its convenience. Registration,
finding the item, reading its description and the seller's feedback, choosing to place a bid or buy instantly,
paying money and checking it after receiving are six main stages to shop online
effectively on eBay.com.
Hi Yen,
ReplyDeleteAfter having read your essay, i have some comment as follow:
You listed tools and preparations needed to carry out this process.i like your introduction. It was quite good. Moreover, the instructions you provided are definitely detailed. I can follow them easy. However, i think you should describe the payment more specific. For example, customers can pay money in cash or on credit.
As I saw, your essay organized step by step from beginning to ending; thus, it is very effective. besides, it seems that you forgot to mention the importance of each step in the beginning. Also, you used transitional sentences effectively.
Overall, You did quite well. Keep practising!
hi Yen. After reading your esay, i have some comments below:
ReplyDelete1. Introduction: it contains the general statements, a thesis statement, background information. It's quite well-done but i think the first sentence when you mention the change of the way to buy product, you can make it clear by pointing out it.
2. Body:overall, it's very good when you write six steps with careful instruction . with 2 first steps , you give the readers many details for resgistering and searching products. However, the rest seem to be not clear. in 3 rd step, i think you should expalin why they should do that such as comparison purpose. especially, 5 th and 6th step, they are important steps in this process while you make it in 2 sentences. you should give us some payment methods such as pay by credit card or through voucher..and the way the buyers receive the product after they paid.
3. conclution : you sumed up all the above steps , but i think you should have more comments about the selling online and selling from ebay.
4. your language is very good because you use words flexibly and there are quite many structures you did.
In general, your writing meets the demands of a process essay. Hope my comments helful for you.
Best,
Hiền