Wednesday, March 20, 2013

Process essay_Hoang Thi Hong Phuong

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Nowadays, Shopping online has become a part of our lives because of its convenience. However, many people especially new experience find it difficult to shop online. Of course, the process of shopping online in each page is a little bit different from each other. For example, to be a successful online shopper on Shoppersstop.com,  just following these steps below.
The first stage begins with finding the items you want to buy by the keyword search boxes.  You will also find links to browse lists and more detailed product-specific searches in the top navigation bar of each division. When you find an item that interests you, click the title or name or images of the item to view its Product Detail page to get more information about the product.
The next stage is adding the items to your shopping bag. While on the product details page, select the size (if applicable) in the dropdown box, and click on “Add to Bag” button. One more interesting thing here is that  you can access the contents of your Shopping Bag at any time by clicking on “Shopping Bag” at the top right corner of every page of the website.
At this point, you go through the most important stage-proceeding to checkout. Before doing this, I suggest that you should take a moment to review all of the items you've placed in your Shopping Bag. If you want to increase or decrease the quantity, just change the number in the Quantity. box and click the “Recalculate Shopping Bag” button at the top of the bag. Select the “Remove from bag” check box next to the item and then click the “Recalculate Shopping Bag” button if you want to remove an item. When you're ready to place an order for everything in your Shopping bag”, you will be given an option to become a First Citizen (the loyalty program), depending on your selection here, you will be taken to the first page of the respective order form after you click the “Secure Check Out” button.
The fourth stage is signing in the page by providing your e-mail address and your password as well. If you are not yet a registered customer, you can register and become a member at www.shoppersstop.com. Choose a login id (this should be your active e-mail account) and password for your account.
The process culminates with entering a shipping address by clicking “continue to billing” button. This last stage is to provide us information about your address to make sure that we ship your order to an exactly place.
In conclusion, by following these stages, you may find that shopping online on Shoppersstop is the easiest thing ever. Hope what I’ve given to you here can help you to become a successful online shopper.


Version 2:


Nowadays, Shopping online has become a part of our lives because of its convenience. However, many people especially new experience find it difficult to shop online. Of course, the process of shopping online in each page is a little bit different from each other. For example, to be a successful online shopper on Shoppersstop.com,  just following these steps below.
        The first stage begins with finding the items you want to buy by the keyword search boxes.  You will also find links to browse lists and more detailed product-specific searches in the top navigation bar of each division. When you find an item that interests you, choose the title or name or images of the item to view its Product Detail page to get more information about the product.
         The next stage is adding the items to your shopping bag. While on the product details page, select the size (if applicable) in the dropdown box, and click on “Add to Bag” button. One more interesting thing here is that  you can access the contents of your Shopping Bag at any time by clicking on “Shopping Bag” at the top right corner of every page of the website.
          At this point, you go through the most important stage-proceeding to checkout. Before doing this, I suggest that you should take a moment to review all of the items you have placed in your Shopping Bag. If you want to increase or decrease the quantity, just change the number in the Quantity. box and click the “Recalculate Shopping Bag” button at the top of the bag. Select the “Remove from bag” check box next to the item and then choose the “Recalculate Shopping Bag” button if you want to remove an item. When you are ready to place an order for everything in your Shopping bag”, you will be given an option to become a First Citizen (the loyalty program), depending on your selection here, you will be taken to the first page of the respective order form after you select the “Secure Check Out” button.
          The fourth step is signing in the page by providing your e-mail address and your password as well. If you are not yet a registered customer, you can register and become a member at www.shoppersstop.com. Choose a login id (this should be your active e-mail account) and password for your account.
          The process culminates with entering a shipping address by clicking “continue to billing” button. This last step is to provide us information about your address to make sure that we ship your order to an exactly place.
In conclusion, by following these steps, you may find that shopping online on Shoppersstop is the easiest thing ever. Hope what I’ve given to you here can help you to become a successful online shopper.

2 comments:

  1. dear Phuong,
    i hope everything is going well with you!
    i have some comment on your essay.
    Generally, your essay is of good quality and well organized. I like it because the instruction you give is easy to follow. Howerver, each paragraph in an essy have to be backed to the one cell but i don't see that in your essay.
    In addition, you shouldn't abbreviation such as:'ve. 're...
    The introduction is good because it contains all the necessary elements : thesis,background information..
    An your good point is to use transitional sentences flexibly. I see that you use "click" too much, instead can use " choose or select", and use " step" more.
    These are some my comment.
    Wíh you good performance
    commented by Pham Thi Nga

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  2. Hi Phuong, after reading your process essay, i have some comments for you:
    - Strong points:
    + The introductions of the essay contain all the neccessary elements(background information, thesis, plan of development)
    + I'm able to follow the instructions you provided.
    + The essay is organized well. The outline is clear. You divide the process of booking
    ticket on the website into 5 steps, each one is instructed in one paragraph
    + The conclusion restated and wrapped up the essay.
    + You used transitional sentences flexibly, good job!
    - Weak points:
    + The way you wrote the essay I think is not eye-cathching, you should back one cell at the beginning of each paragraph so that readers can easily remember all the steps
    + In the third stage, I think you used word ''click'' so many times. You may replace it with words: choose or select
    Overall, your essay is well-done. Do hope my comments are helpful for you.

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