version 1:
Online shopping-a new technology that has been created along with the development of the Internet, is a convenient method of shopping. It allows for a vast array of products to be at your fingertips. Among the websites which offer this kind of shopping method, Flipkart is one of India’s popular online shopping stores and it is commonly known as the Amazon of India. Its online purchase requires you to follow some simple steps to make it successful. So, here in the following section of this essay, I will walk you through those procedural steps.
The First set of steps involve Searching and
adding items in your shopping cart.
As usual, login to Flipkart.com. On the top left hand side of the
Flipkart page, you can see a sidebar of various categories. Next, you should
select the category under which the item that you are going to purchase. For
example, if you want to buy a Nikon camera, then select the
category Cameras and then the sub-category Nikon under Brands. After
that, from the items list thus displayed, if you find the item which you want
to buy then click on that respective item. In case, if the item which you want
to buy is not displayed in the list, use the Search box to type the exact name
of the item and then select the item you want to buy from the search list of
items thus displayed.You will now have the item that you want to purchase
displayed on the Flipkart page. In the next step, you have to click on the
Orange button that says "buy This Now".
The second set of steps involve selecting payment mode and
placing order.
You have to click on "Place Order" button which will
direct you to the Secure Payment page where you are suppose to enter
your E-mail Address, Shipping address-where you want the items to be delivered
and the mode of payment. In the next step, enter your Shipping address. you should
ensure that you enter this address correctly. After entering the address, click
on the "Save" button.
Finally, all you have to do is waiting for Flipkart's arrival.
Online shopping-a new technology that has been created
along with the development of the Internet, is a convenient method of shopping.
It allows for a vast array of products to be at your fingertips. Among the
websites which offer this kind of shopping method, Flipkart is one of
India’s most popular online shopping stores and it is commonly known as the Amazon
of India. Its online purchase requires you to follow some simple steps to
make it successful. So, here in the following sections of this essay, I will
walk you through those procedural steps.
The
First set of steps involves Searching and adding items to your shopping cart.
As
usual, log in to Flipkart.com. On the top left hand side of the
Flipkart page, you can see a sidebar of various categories. Next, you should
select the category under which the item that you are going to purchase. For
example, if you want to buy a Nikon camera, then select the
category Cameras and then the sub-category Nikon under Brands. After
that, from the items list displayed, if you find your desired item, then click on that respective one. In case, if the item which you want
to buy is not available in the list, use the Search box to type the exact name
of the product and then select it from that list. You will now have the item that you want to purchase
displayed on the Flipkart page. In the next step, you have to click on the
Orange button that says "buy This Now".
The
second set of steps involves selecting payment mode and placing order.
You have to click on "Place Order" button which will direct you to the Secure Payment page where you are supposed to
enter your E-mail Address, shipping address-where you want the items to be
delivered and the mode of payment. In the next step, enter
your Shipping address. You should ensure that you type this address correctly. After
entering the address, click on the "Save" button.
Finally, by following these simple steps, all you have to do is waiting for Flipkart's arrival comfortably at your house, without wasting time going directly to the shops.
Finally, by following these simple steps, all you have to do is waiting for Flipkart's arrival comfortably at your house, without wasting time going directly to the shops.
Hi Van,
ReplyDeleteGenerally speaking, your hard work comes to me as a quite good one. It mentions to an interesting website which can enrich our knowledge of outside world. Moreover, your writing is very logical and easy to understand with detailed introduction. Especially, I'd love the way you express your ideas with variety of vocabularies.
However, there is still something making me confused. I will list them here so that we both can reconsider.
- Verb form:
+ The First/ second set of steps involve Searching and
=> The first/second set of steps involves searching and…
+ you are suppose to enter your E-mail Address
=> you are supposed to enter your E-mail Address
- Word choice:
+here in the following section of this essay
=> here in the following sections of this essay
+ Searching and adding items in your shopping cart.
=> here in the following sections of this essay
+ login to
=> log into (http://www.englishforums.com/English/LogInIntoIntoOnto/vzdxc/post.htm)
- Expression:
+ select the item you want to buy from the search list of items
=> select the item you want to buy from the list of searched items
To sum up, your writing almost has no faults. And these are just several so small ones.
I hope that they are helpful for you when writing your version 2 of Process essay.
Best,
Nguyen Thi Nguyet.
i've already look it up and found out this thing to share with you:
Delete"When used as a verb, use log in to
When used as an adjective, use log-in
When used as a noun, use login
Examples:
When you log in to the system, verify that you have the correct log-in information. My login is lehaivan.1993."
_vân_
Hi Hai Van,
ReplyDeleteHere is my opinion about your process essay:
Generally, it is a very well-organized essay. I love the way you write the introduction- really attention-catching.
Except for some small grammar mistakes that are already mentioned in the comment above (:p), hardly can I find any more fault in your essay. Well done!
One more point, I suggest that you should have a more in detail conclusion, with the restatement which will make your essay become more clear to readers.
Hope that this will be useful for you. Thanks for reading this :)
thanks for your helpful comments !
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